For the Ladies

[boostdeliquent]

OK, I was bored this morning and wrote a poem for my GF, Meggin. LMK what ya'll think and I esp. want to hear from the ladies. :)

Passion, Excitement, My senses are heightened
Every moment I'm w/ you gets harder to hide it.
As you lie in my bed, w/ your head on my chest
The feelings aroused, I cannot contest.
I brush my hand through your hair, as I look at you there
Perfection at a glance, it's hard not to stare
You look over and smile, it makes me feel like a child
Butterflies dancing, my heart races wild
The moments together, could never be better
Every time that you're w/ me, I feel I'm in heaven

I wrote this for my beautiful GF, Meggin.

[CIVICRicerBoy]

Nice! Looks good to me. But then again, I'm not a girl...so yeah. :TU:

[clemsonvic]

rep because it rhymes, im more into stuff that doesnt rhyme like this

What a skeletal wreck of a man this is
Translucent flesh and feeble bones
The kind of temple where the whores and villians try to tempt the holistic tones
Running rampant with free thought to free form the free and clear
And the matters at hand are shelled out like lint at a laundromat to sift and focus on the bigger, better, NOW
We all have a little sin that needs venting, virtues for the rending and laws and systems and stems ripped from the branches of office do you know what your post entails?
Do you serve a purpose or purposely serve?
Wind down inside your adivistic allure, the value of a summer spent and a winter earned
For the rest of us there is always sunday
The day of the week that reeks of rest but all we do is catch our breath so we can wade naked into the bloody pool and place our hand on the big black book
To watch the knives zigzag between our aching fingers
A vacation is a countdown
T minus your life and counting
Time to drag your tongue across the sugar cube and hope you get a taste
WHAT THE FUCK IS ALL THIS FOR? (*background*WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON?) SHUT UP!
I could go on and on but let's move on shall we?
Say, you're me and I'm you and they all watch the things we do and like a smack of spite they threw me down the stairs haven't felt like this in years the great magnet of malicious magnanimous refuse
Let me go and plunge me into the dead spot again
That's where you go when theres no one else around it's just you and there was never anyone to begin with now was there?
Sanctimonious pretentious dastardly bastards with their thumb on the pulse and a finger on the trigger
CLASSIFIED MY ASS THAT'S A FUCKING SECRET AND YOU KNOW IT!
Government is another way to say better, than, you!
It's like ice but no pick a murder charge that won't stick its like a whole other world where you can smell the food
But you can't touch the silverware
*laughs* What luck!
Facism you can vote for
*snorts* Isn't that sweet
And were all gonna die someday 'cause that's the american way and I've drunk too much and said too little when you're gaffer taped in the middle say a prayer save face get yourself together and (*sung in the background* SEE WHAT'S HAPPENING!) SHUT UP! (*background* FUCK YOU!) FUCK YOU!
I'm sorry I could go on and on but its time to move on so
Remember, your a wreck an accident
Forget the freak your just nature
Keep the gun oiled and the temple clean
Shit, snort and blaspheme let the heads cool and the engine run because in the end everything we do, is just everything we've done.

[gloryhog]

damn:alky:

[OniFactor]

:fruit:

[modsHXcivi]

:fruit:

:mikej: :mikej: ....

[OniFactor]

i didn't even read it. lollerz :fag:

[boostdeliquent]

rep because it rhymes, im more into stuff that doesnt rhyme like this

What a skeletal wreck of a man this is
Translucent flesh and feeble bones
The kind of temple where the whores and villians try to tempt the holistic tones
Running rampant with free thought to free form the free and clear
And the matters at hand are shelled out like lint at a laundromat to sift and focus on the bigger, better, NOW
We all have a little sin that needs venting, virtues for the rending and laws and systems and stems ripped from the branches of office do you know what your post entails?
Do you serve a purpose or purposely serve?
Wind down inside your adivistic allure, the value of a summer spent and a winter earned
For the rest of us there is always sunday
The day of the week that reeks of rest but all we do is catch our breath so we can wade naked into the bloody pool and place our hand on the big black book
To watch the knives zigzag between our aching fingers
A vacation is a countdown
T minus your life and counting
Time to drag your tongue across the sugar cube and hope you get a taste
WHAT THE FUCK IS ALL THIS FOR? (*background*WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON?) SHUT UP!
I could go on and on but let's move on shall we?
Say, you're me and I'm you and they all watch the things we do and like a smack of spite they threw me down the stairs haven't felt like this in years the great magnet of malicious magnanimous refuse
Let me go and plunge me into the dead spot again
That's where you go when theres no one else around it's just you and there was never anyone to begin with now was there?
Sanctimonious pretentious dastardly bastards with their thumb on the pulse and a finger on the trigger
CLASSIFIED MY ASS THAT'S A FUCKING SECRET AND YOU KNOW IT!
Government is another way to say better, than, you!
It's like ice but no pick a murder charge that won't stick its like a whole other world where you can smell the food
But you can't touch the silverware
*laughs* What luck!
Facism you can vote for
*snorts* Isn't that sweet
And were all gonna die someday 'cause that's the american way and I've drunk too much and said too little when you're gaffer taped in the middle say a prayer save face get yourself together and (*sung in the background* SEE WHAT'S HAPPENING!) SHUT UP! (*background* FUCK YOU!) FUCK YOU!
I'm sorry I could go on and on but its time to move on so
Remember, your a wreck an accident
Forget the freak your just nature
Keep the gun oiled and the temple clean
Shit, snort and blaspheme let the heads cool and the engine run because in the end everything we do, is just everything we've done.

Thanks for the compliment and nice poem. You make it very apparent that you're not satisfied w/ the government in a rather eloquent way however go :hijacked: someone elses thread. This is MY thread to showcase what I wrote for my GF.

[clemsonvic]

I actually didnt write that, wish i did cause its good, its by Stone Sour

[boostdeliquent]

OK, my mistake. In that case give me my rep back. ;)

[boostdeliquent]

:fruit:

Perhaps so, But I guarantee you she fucks my brains out when she see's me later tonight. :p

[black94sol]

yo jake...i commented on yo myspace...that is bad ass fasho

[boostdeliquent]

Yeah J thanks. I just saw that.

[d-ranged]

Perhaps so, But I guarantee you she fucks my brains out when she see's me later tonight. :p

why we do the things we do :TU:

[OniFactor]

lollercoaster, you have to be all frilly and gay, to get your brains fucked out, whereas i just have to be me. :cool:

[boostdeliquent]

I'm a good writer and use that to play to girls emotions. Some guys might call it frilly and gay but it's not exactly directed to them is it. Any guy can play the whole "Oh, I'll just spit some game shit but when you can play words well enough to make a girl cry, that's something. Besides that, have any average girl read this and tell me if they use the words frilly and gay to describe it. I'm sure their perception of it will be anything but that.

[OniFactor]

lol, you DO realize i'm just fucking with you, right? personally, i think the poetry thing is a bit high school-ish, when you can do other things, but that's just me.

[boostdeliquent]

Yeah, I suppose. I was just running short on nicotine when I read that and replied so it irritated me a bit. Besides that, this is actually the first time I wrote anything like this for any girl since 11th grade or so. Then again, this is also the first time I've met any girl that can hold down a conversation w/ me about cars so maybe that explains it.

[Beeza]

lol, you DO realize i'm just fucking with you, right? personally, i think the poetry thing is a bit high school-ish, when you can do other things, but that's just me.

This is true.But if it can be delivered like 2Pac delivered it.....it aint frilly and gay.

Yay 2Pac.

[_CXhatch_]

nice poem man did ur woman break down in tears lol

[boostdeliquent]

I think she liked it. Here's a link to her reply.

http://blog.myspace.com/index.cfm?fuseaction=blog.view&friendID=39231785&blogID=194310879&MyToken=3a2e82cd-3392-4d4b-9d75-b0878da28c91